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Post by jessiree on Nov 27, 2005 19:03:42 GMT -5
breathe once, I'll shutter breathe twice while your next to me, and I'll faint and fall to my face to your hand my heart shall beat no more move in closer now run your finger through my hair look into my eyes your lips so close to mine and I'll be to scared to breathe kiss me, hold me, and i will no longer be myself for you you have consumed me and it's just as well
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Post by arcanephantom on Dec 4, 2005 22:37:04 GMT -5
Really well written. I like the portrayal of the person surrendering themself to their tempter/temptress. Kind of a sweet eroticism in the way you wrote it. And then there's the whole other end of the spectrum with the domination. It fits very well. Becky
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Post by jessiree on Dec 5, 2005 15:31:55 GMT -5
thanks i kind of wanted it that way thank you for commenting
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