I cut my finger today

[jessiree]

;D
[glow=red,2,300]I cut my finger today.....
i watched it bleed......
I cut my finger today...
trying to change me.....
I cut my finger today....
it wasn't a suicidal cut......
I cut my finger today.....
and not in the way most would think.....
I cut my finger today
and then watched locks of hair fall in the sink.[/glow]

[jessiree]

if you have any suggestions for anything a better title perhaps let me know
and just tell what you think in gerneral be as harsh as possible
thanks

[*GoThIc_FairY*]

I like it for the most part, but i got confused at the end with the locks of hair falling in the sink- other than being confused, i liked it though!

[arcanephantom]

i as well got confused at then ending part. perhaps you could reveal this little mystery ending. i cant really get enough out of the poem to suggest a different title. and i don't really see the big point of the poem. what exactly are you trying to tell people through this? perhaps make it more evident yet make it still so people have to think a little on it. don't put it right out there, that's not always fun. just little suggestions or things to think on. nice job.
deidre