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Post by Jeni on Nov 27, 2005 14:18:18 GMT -5
Today I hate the world, And everyone in it, Today I will wear my make-up extra dark, Dramatic lines to tell people to stay away, Today I will cut myself to show them what I can’t say…
Today I view the world as a beautiful place, Today I wear bright colors to say “I’m happy” Today I cut myself because I know this happiness won't last…
Today I feel like dying, Today I’m to sad to wear make-up, To weak to get out of bed, I can’t go to school, I have a migraine, Had to take a bunch of pain pills, and sleep it off, Today I turn my phone off, I don’t feel like talking to anyone, I am dead… Today I cut myself to see if I’m alive, To see if I’m dead yet…
Today I feel lonely, No-one bothered to call I could have been dead, And no-one would have noticed, Am I really that invisible? Am I really that alone? Today I cut myself to see if anyone notices…
Tomorrow, No one will call, Tomorrow I will die a bit more, Feel another piece of my heart cut away, Tomorrow I won’t be here, Because for me tomorrow’s don’t exist, And I will cut myself to bleed, To feel the blade enter my skin, To be back in control, To see myself in pain, Because I deserve to be in pain!
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Post by jessiree on Nov 27, 2005 18:41:43 GMT -5
scary write i know how you feel but i'd miss ya! great write i felt your dispare!
keep writing
-jess
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Post by *GoThIc_FairY* on Nov 27, 2005 20:06:41 GMT -5
wow, I really liked your poem.. It was so.. ah i dont know how to describe it other than terrific! Sad, but great.
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Post by americanclassicx3 on Nov 28, 2005 22:32:45 GMT -5
omg this poem SO GOOD. it's written so well. i love it.
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Post by alexeiogrodov on Nov 29, 2005 20:36:26 GMT -5
Very good! I liked it a lot. Alex
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Post by Jeni on Dec 1, 2005 17:59:23 GMT -5
thank you all for reading, and letting me know what you think, it means alot
thank you so much!!!!
love jeni
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Post by *GoThIc_FairY* on Dec 5, 2005 14:17:40 GMT -5
I just had to reread your poem.. i love it oh my gosh! and right now i can relate like 100 percent omg !thanks for sharing this poem!
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Post by Jeni on Dec 6, 2005 19:58:24 GMT -5
lol thank you so much emochick LOL ,
it means alot, and i'm glad u like it
thank u for reading again
Love Jeni
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Post by *GoThIc_FairY* on Dec 6, 2005 21:45:45 GMT -5
haha no problem~ It just i can really relate to it soo much~ so its like wow! omg great job
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Post by arcanephantom on Dec 25, 2005 6:59:30 GMT -5
An array of moods. It was like a journal in poem form. It was a very clever style. And I loved the content as well. Extremely expressive. I can totally relate to that in past feelings. My heart goes out to you. Love you babe, deidre
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Post by mikethelemming on Jan 8, 2006 22:31:24 GMT -5
what i think would have been more dramatic would be if you added more to the second stanza or keep it out. i got mixed signals because at parts it feels like you're trying to cover different scenarios, yet, the second stanza is cut short. that was also the only "happy" part of the poem, which either makes feel out of place or a weak portion of another view. but that's just my opinion. i liked the dark expression in this, keeping out the second stanza. it flowed well and was meaningful. nice write
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Post by Jeni on Jan 10, 2006 17:23:18 GMT -5
thanks for the comment
love ya
~Jeni
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