celtrasa
I've been around
Whos the real me?
Posts: 93
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Goodbye
Nov 28, 2005 15:53:24 GMT -5
Post by celtrasa on Nov 28, 2005 15:53:24 GMT -5
There she walks, Down that road, With knife in hand, She’s ready to let go. He never listened, He never cared, And worst of all, He was never there. She needed him, But now he’s gone. And she was left to live on. She doesn’t want to, No one else cares, Now the bloods running Off her fingers. Her mind races, Her steps slow, And now it’s time For her to go.
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Goodbye
Nov 28, 2005 20:49:28 GMT -5
Post by *GoThIc_FairY* on Nov 28, 2005 20:49:28 GMT -5
Hello.. Oh my gosh- I really liked your poem. It is really sad- But good!
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Goodbye
Dec 25, 2005 7:21:52 GMT -5
Post by arcanephantom on Dec 25, 2005 7:21:52 GMT -5
Wow! Kinda of a mystery b/c you never outright say in the poem what's going on. You just vaguely describe the situation and the stiff behind it. Mystique! I like it. Clever and well put together. deidre
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Goodbye
Dec 25, 2005 15:06:44 GMT -5
Post by Jeni on Dec 25, 2005 15:06:44 GMT -5
i also liked the way you mad it so mysterious, it makes the reader site for a couple mintues after reading it... just to to peice it together, but you did an awesome job writing it!!!
luv ~Jeni
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Post by mikethelemming on Jan 8, 2006 5:45:43 GMT -5
this was quite powerful. i think this is the best poem i've read for you so far. great write, i enjoyed this
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