Railing Away

[alexeiogrodov]

Hey guys,
I haven't written the chorus yet. Suggestions?

Railing Away

An empty car of an invisible train
With no destination,
It's just railing away.

A hollow unit of a rattling chain
Speeding up into nowhere,
It's just railing away.

I am by the window, loooking at rain
Smiling at nothing,
I am just railing away.

I spent all desire to lose and to gain,
To hope for impossible,
I am just railing away.

The world I am leaving is nothing but vain,
I don't want to struggle,
I am just railing away.

I have gone crazy from nonsense and pain,
I don't regret,
I am just railing away.

[jessiree]

i really like it
but as for the suggestions
i got none
if i think of something i'll let ya know

~jess

[alexeiogrodov]

That's fine... take your time...LOL I've been thinking about the chorus for three months with zero positive results so far... LOL
Thanks,
Alex

[arcanephantom]

an interesting way of displaying emotions behind this. very cool. umm.. i'm not too sure about ideas. maybe a little more descriptiveness. i mean, it's not too bad but creative word selection or description is somewhat inhibited. but i'm not too sure. but it is good so far.
deidre

[alexeiogrodov]

Hey Deidre,
Thanks again... It was written a year ago... I haven't changed a word yet... Too busy... Getting ready for publication...
Best wishes,
Alex